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Fic: First Lessons, GEN, G
Okay, this was a commentfic! Just a two-minute commentfic I was going to post on my lunch hour. It's all [info]sg_fignewton's fault. That and my complete inability to drabble. *goes back to work muttering*

* TITLE: First Lessons
* AUTHOR: Redbyrd
* RATING: G
* CATEGORY: episode tag
* SUMMARY: Ry'ac learns some new things after receiving his primta—but is he taking them seriously enough?
* SPOILERS: S1 Bloodlines
* AUTHOR'S NOTE: For sg_fignewton, who said that Ry'ac was not a very distinct character to her.
* WARNINGS: None
* DISCLAIMER:
The characters mentioned in this story are the property of Showtime and Gekko Film Corp. The Stargate, SG-I, the Goa'uld and all other characters who have appeared in the series STARGATE SG-1 together with the names, titles and backstory are the sole copyright property of MGM-UA Worldwide Television, Gekko Film Corp, Glassner/Wright Double Secret Productions and Stargate SG-I Prod. Ltd. Partnership. This fanfic is not intended as an infringement upon those rights and solely meant for entertainment. All other characters, the story idea and the story itself are the sole property of the author.
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When Ry'ac opened his eyes, it was morning. He was back on his own mattress, in his own tent. He almost thought the weeks of sickness were a bad dream. Like one where his father came back and said…said…what? He'd been so tired, yesterday. But he remembered the priest…he shoved aside the blankets to look at his chest, and there it was, the smooth-edged flaps of a Jaffa pouch, not the faintly marked skin he'd had yesterday. He scrambled up and fumbled into a tunic before running outside. Today he didn't notice the threadbare tent that replaced the sturdy house they used to live in, or the firepit that his mother cooked flatbread over instead of baking fine risen bread in a stone oven.

"Ry'ac!" His mother turned away from the fire. "How do you feel?"

He shrugged off her cool hand on his forehead. "I am well, mother. I have a primta now!"

"Yes," his mother didn't look as happy and proud as he would have expected. "And you must learn now to kel'no'reem, or you will soon be sicker than you were yesterday." She turned to the fire. "Take your breakfast, Ry'ac, and then you must go see Master Bra'tac."

Ry'ac took a piece of warm bread where it rested on the stone by the fire, and bit into it hungrily. It was better with honey, but that was a luxury they had not had in some time. He swallowed. "I dreamed I saw Master Bra'tac when I was sick," he said. "And my father--" he broke off. They never talked about Father. Not since he was killed and they'd been driven from their home and become kreshta.

"You did not dream, he was here," Drey'auc said shortly.

"Father?" Ry'ac said in surprise. "He's alive? You said he died--I really saw him!" He looked around a bit wildly.

"I did not think he would return," Drey'auc said reluctantly. "So I thought it kinder to tell you he was dead. He and his friends left again. They wanted to stop you being implanted, but you were too sick."

Ry'ac frowned, confused and rather angry. His mother lied? And his father came and then left again? Not that it was unusual for Teal'c to be gone--most of Ry'ac's life he was away on the god's business. Finding out he was not dead but simply away seemed oddly more normal than the recent months of upheaval and sickness. "Why did he want to stop me being implanted?" Didn't his father know that Ry'ac was practically grown up? How could he become a warrior without a primta?

His mother pulled the pan off the fire, and set it down with a bang. "He was worried about you," she said tightly, in that way that said she was angry with his father but wasn't going to talk about it to him.

"Why didn't he stay?" Ry'ac asked.

His mother frowned. "Eat your bread."

Ry'ac hastily jammed the last of his bread into his mouth and took two more pieces before it was put away. "M'really hungry," he said.

His mother looked worried. "Yes, you'll need to have more to eat, now that you have a primta," she said.

Ry'ac had never thought of that. She must be worried about having enough food. They'd often been hungry, these last few months. He moved to put the bread back, but she gently closed her hand over his.

"Eat it, Ryac. You will need more food to remain strong now. You feed the primta as well as yourself."

Ryac swallowed the bread, feeling puzzled. He hadn't known that one needed more food with a primta. He looked at the meager pile of bread that would last them the whole day, unless his mother could barter for more grain. "Is that why Father--" he stopped, not sure what wanted to ask. Why wasn't his father here, helping them?

His mother met his eyes, her dark gaze thoughtful. "He asked me--us--to go with him, Ry'ac," she said. "Perhaps we should have--but it's bad enough being the next best thing to beggars here. I would not seek the charity of strangers, and take you away from your people and our home. And his friends do not carry primtas--mine will mature within the year. If we left Chulak, where would I get another? And where would you?"

"Where is Father?" Ry'ac asked. He tried to remember yesterday, but it was a blur of fever and discomfort. There were several other men, pale-skinned, wearing strange garb of dull green?

"He has gone away through the chappa'ai, with his friends the Tau'ri," she said. "Now go- Bra'tac is waiting for you."

*

Ry'ac licked the last crumbs of the warm flatbread from his fingers, then broke into a run along the riverbank, feeling the strength flow into his arms and legs. It was easy to forget how anxious he'd been about the implantation now it was over. He scooped up a rock and threw it as hard as he could out over the water, watching with delight as it cleared the opposite bank and crashed through the tree branches. He laughed with sheer pleasure. And his father tried to stop this? He would never be sick again, never be tired- he ran full on into a warm solid bulk and bounced off onto the ground before even his new reflexes could respond.

He would have scrambled to his feet, but the butt of Master Bra'tac's staff was poised about his throat, and he dared not move. "You are late, boy," the older man said.

Ry'ac flushed guiltily. His mother had only reminded him three times that morning that he was to spend the afternoon learning the discipline of kel'no'reem with Bra'tac. He thought resentfully that it was his father who should have taught him, if he hadn't run away and abandoned his family. The other boys taunted him, saying his father was a coward, and he had betrayed the god because he was afraid to face battle. Then he realized that he was the first of his age-mates to be implanted. None would be able to stand against him now.

"You shall not use your new strength against the other boys," Bra'tac said.

Ry'ac's eyes went wide with terror and all thoughts of childish revenge fled. Could the old Jaffa Master read minds?

Bra'tac looked down at him disapprovingly. "You must put aside childhood, and begin your training as a warrior." He moved the staff aside. "And your first lesson is that you must be aware of your surroundings. You should find your opponents by observation, not by running into them."

Ry'ac scrambled to his feet, at once aware that his tunic was dirty and ruffled. "Yes, Master Bra'tac."

"Come along," Bra'tac said.

The older man led him swiftly through the trees, to a clearing. A training ground, Ry'ac realized, seeing the log structures meant for staff drill and physical training. "Why do we not train at the village ground?" he asked, picturing himself going through staff drill while the other children watched- as he himself had so often watched the older boys.

"Your father wishes you to learn things that I taught him," Bra'tac said. "And some of these are best discussed privately." There were two meditation mats already spread on the ground. The older Jaffa gracefully sank down onto one, motioning Ry'ac onto the other.

Somewhat self-consciously, Ry'ac folded himself into the position for kel'no'reem, conscious that this was no longer play- his primta moved in its pouch. He squirmed under Bra'tac's scrutiny scrutiny. "My father ran away," he said, resentment in his tone. He left me.

Bra'tac said, "Your father had no choice- if he stayed Apophis would have killed him, and he would never see you again."

Ry'ac blinked. Bra'tac was speaking to him as if he were not a child. "I heard that the god thinks my father betrayed him. They call him shol'va."

Bra'tac was still watching him closely. "That is because Apophis knows that your father knows his secret. As do I. As your father wishes me to tell you."

Ry'ac straightened and looked expectant.

"Apophis is no god," Bra'tac continued. "He is a creature of another sort, a Goa'uld. He inhabits the body of a human. He destroys the mind and wears the body like a piece of clothing. When he is through, he will cast it off and take over the body of another."

Ry'ac felt a strange slithering in his chest--no, his pouch. "Will--will the primta do that to me?" he asked.

Bratac shook his head. "The Goa'uld do not use Jaffa in that way. Instead, we are their soldiers. We are brought up to believe they are gods--they are not. More than that, once we carry a primta, we can no longer live without it. We are dependent on them to provide another when the one we carry matures. They use our belief and our physical dependence to enslave us."

"We are not slaves!" Ry'ac protested. He had seen slaves in the grounds of the temple, or laboring in the fields. Weak pitiful creatures, fit only to serve their betters.

"Are we not?" Bra'tac asked seriously. "We fight at their order, or we are punished. We die at their command or our families suffer. We carry their children in our bodies for the health and strength it gives us--but we ever after, we are bound to them. We take pride in the honor of Jaffa, yet our honor is nothing when set against the whim of the least of the Goa'uld."

Ry'ac swallowed. Suddenly the primta that had filled him with pride an hour ago, felt more like a trap, now. He folded his hands over the pouch, feeling the symbiote move uneasily inside. He remembered Drey'auc telling him that his father had not wanted him implanted, that they had had to stay on Chulak because otherwise, they would die when they needed another symbiote. Did that mean his father would die, when he needed another symbiote? But Jaffa carried symbiotes- it was the way things were. Was it truly slavery? He remembered seeing a Jaffa executed in the city square, for failing in his duty to the gods. But surely that was not the same as laboring in the field. "But slaves are only humans!"

"Your father's friends are also human," Bra'tac said. "Tau'ri, from the First World. They banished Ra from their world centuries ago, and finally hunted him down and killed him. They now fight against Apophis and the other Goa'uld. Your father has joined them in the hope that one day, all Jaffa will be free."

Bra'tac never called them gods, Ry'ac realized. "That is why he left?" He looked at the gold brand on his forehead, so like Teal'c's. First Prime, as his father had been after him. Bra'tac and his father knew the gods better than any other Jaffa.

"Yes, that and because it is better than being dead," Bra'tac said. "He wished you to learn this about the Goa'uld. So that you can help him, when you are a warrior."

Ry'ac absorbed this. "But will not the gods--the Goa'uld--punish him if he is caught? What if they catch us? They must know--" The gods could see anything they wanted, couldn't they?

"Apophis does not know all," Bra'tac said, "He has devices." Bra'tac touched his staff weapon lightly. "These are tools. A tool does not make one a warrior. A true warrior will fight with sticks, with his hands and his mind. Without their tools, a Goa'uld is weaker than the least Jaffa. Because they do not train, do not strive."

This was a daring thought. Jaffa, better than the Goa'uld? The gods, helpless without their mysterious tools? It was certainly true that the God Apophis was very angry with his father--but his father had escaped! Truly, the gods could not be all powerful. His father's words floated back to him. 'I know the day will come when we will stand side by side in battle to free our people from the false gods. Remember, my son, remember.' He looked at Master Bra'tac. "And will you teach me to be a warrior, Master? Like my father? So I can help to fight the go--the Goa'uld?"

Bra'tac looked at him intently, and then gave him a slight smile. "I will, Ry'ac. And if you work hard, you will be a great warrior indeed." He shifted slightly on the mat. "But you must understand that few believe as we do. We must keep our beliefs a secret while we plan our actions."

"I can keep a secret!" Ry'ac promised.

Bra'tac said seriously, "You must. Or we could all die--you, me, your mother. This is very important, Ry'ac. You cannot speak to your friends of this, to anyone. You must be cautious and clever, always. The gods are not all-knowing, but they do watch us. And they have spies. This is warrior's business, not children's. I would not have chosen to teach you this yet, but your father insisted."

Ry'ac was simultaneously filled with pride at his father's confidence and determination to prove to Bra'tac that he was trustworthy. "I will tell no one!" he said. "I swear it."

Bra'tac nodded. "See that you remember." He looked critically at Ry'ac. "Now we will practice kel'no'reem," he announced. "Straighten your back, boy."

Ry'ac straightened his back and tried to subdue the whirl of thoughts that distracted him from Bra'tac's lesson. Already he felt older than he had just this morning. He would become a warrior, and stand beside his father in battle against false gods. Teal'c had said so.



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[info]sg_fignewton
2007-10-11 05:33 pm UTC (link)
Oh, Redbyrd, lovely!

A reasonable explanation of why they didn't leave - and very much in character for Drey'auc, who later dies rather than let another die in her place. And Ry'ac really did come nicely to life here.

But - and I'm sorry, since that wasn't your intention! - Bra'tac completely took over this fic with his awesomeness. I can't say I'm sorry. It's probably not your fault; any story with Bra'tac in it is bound to be overwhelmed. :)

Lovely conversation between Ry'ac and Bra'tac. I love how Bra'tac talks to him as an adult, yet explains things clearly enough for him to understand.

One question: didn't Drey'auc actually tell Ry'ac that Teal'c was dead, not that he'd fled Chulak?

Very nice all round. And thank you for the lovely gift! :)

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[info]redbyrd_sgfic
2007-10-11 05:53 pm UTC (link)
You're welcome *g*.

And I really don't mind Bra'tac taking over- you're perfectly right, he's terrific. (Not to mention really relieved that Ry'ac turned out to be malleable enough to go along with the secret as opposed to him being forced to do something he'd really rather not contemplate.)

Hmm- you're right, Drey'auc does tell Ry'ac that Teal'c was dead, and I should account for that somehow. *pause for quick re-edit* Okay, that's a bit better. It's really quite a challenge to write a viewpoint for a character this young. This was really probably too new to post, but it was so timely I couldn't resist! No guarantees I won't go back and edit bits of it in a day or two!

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[info]sg_fignewton
2007-10-11 06:00 pm UTC (link)
Heh. I sometimes go back and obsessively edit tiny bits of fic weeks or months after I've posted them! The fix is seamless.

BTW, aren't you on SG1 Debrief's list? Because I just did my tagging, and while my own rec for this little fic of yours showed up on the list, the fic itself did not.

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[info]redbyrd_sgfic
2007-10-11 06:12 pm UTC (link)
Hmm? I keep meaning to check out SG1 Debrief, but I've not managed to make it over there year. So, probably not.

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[info]sg_fignewton
2007-10-11 06:20 pm UTC (link)
::thwaps::

Well, go and sign up! It's right here: [info]sg1_debrief. And I think you officially sign up to have your posts tagged over here; the policy has changed slightly since the beginning. Very, very, very worthwhile.

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[info]aurora_novarum
2007-10-11 06:29 pm UTC (link)
Oh you have to check it out. But even if you don't watch it, it's surprising your stuff hasn't been picked up. I gathered it was more an "opt out" than an "opt in" thing.

Basically any and everything SG-1 related on live journal in the past (week/two weeks) is linked to (unless flocked or author requested not to be on it). Con reports, announcements, when new eps were airing, reviews on that were every week. Meta posts, fics, artwork, recs, icons, etc etc show up every other week. New lists are posted every Thursday.

So basically it's just a one stop shopping to find SG-1 stuff because it's essentially a list of links. But it's a great way to find stuff.

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[info]sg1debrief
2007-10-12 12:05 am UTC (link)
It used to be opt out, until the watch list hit 500 journals about eight months in and my head exploded. :) And since only half those people were actually posting about SG-1, we changed it to an opt in.

Because I am apparently weird in that I never thought the darn thing would become that popular. :)

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[info]aurora_novarum
2007-10-11 06:31 pm UTC (link)
She just posted this today! How can it be showing up on the debrief? The debrief isn't up yet (and isn't it half issue week?)

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[info]sg_fignewton
2007-10-11 06:38 pm UTC (link)
Sorry. Let me clarify: I'm lucky enough to be one of the taggers for the newsletter. That means that every day or two or three, I scroll through the newsletter's friends' list and tag any posts that fall into my tagging category. Julie then rounds up all the tags from all the taggers and codes them into the newsletter - and yes, the next full issue isn't coming out until next week.

As it happens, I went off to tag right after I posted my rec for this, and while my own rec showed up quite nicely on the friends' list, Redbyrd's actual post did not. That's why I asked. And hopefully, she'll join the list so that a lot more people will get to read her fic! :)

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[info]redbyrd_sgfic
2007-10-11 06:44 pm UTC (link)
Ah! The key bit of info.. I was just glancing at the link you posted and wondering how the links were collected. *goes off to friend the debrief list*

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[info]aurora_novarum
2007-10-11 06:53 pm UTC (link)
Oh, it's because she's not on that "don't friend this back" lj debrief dude for whatever reason. LOL. Got it! Yes, I can see if you add stuff not on that thing, it can get unwieldy (because there may be a reason it's NOT on being listed, i.e. people not wanting to be linked). Actually, I can see even if you do only use that flist to tag, it gets unwieldly. Hee. I'm always amazed at how the debrief works.

*whispers* Redbyrd could probably allow her links to be friended even if she doesn't want to sign up to receive the debrief--you're in the know of that organization, not me--even though SHE SHOULD FRIEND THE SITE REGARDLESS! */not so whispering* :-D

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[info]sg_fignewton
2007-10-11 06:58 pm UTC (link)
The debrief works because Julie is AWESOME. Really, it's as simple as that.

And if someone wanted to have their posts linked, but not have the newsletter show on their friends' list... ::shrugs:: No reason why not. Don't know why they'd want to, though. :)

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[info]aelfgyfu_mead
2007-10-11 08:20 pm UTC (link)
I'm still confused. I signed up for sg1-debrief some time ago. When I posted a new fic and put an entry on LJ that links to the fic, no one saw it. I had to e-mail one of the organizers (she says it'll be listed next week). What else am I supposed to sign up for?

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[info]sg_fignewton
2007-10-11 08:33 pm UTC (link)
Okay, I'll try to explain this. Hopefully I won't mess up. And my apologies to Redbyrd for pre-empting the feedback on her wonderful story! (Bra'tac rocks. So does Drey'auc. And Ry'ac is delightfully personable without being annoying. There, that should do it...)

There are two aspects to SG-1 Debrief: getting the newsletter "delivered" to your flist, and getting your posts included on the newsletter's flist. The newsletter's flist is actually on a different comm entirely.

Way back when the newsletter first started, basically everyone who friended the newsletter automatically got their LJ added to the flist that is scanned for tagging purposes. You can imagine how huge the flist was at that point! As time went on, Julie stopped having the newsletter automatically friend everyone back, and started trimming the flist down to those LJs that posted about SG-1 at least once in the last four months. With that pruning accomplished, the taggers had to fight their way through a lot less irrelevancies. Although I still find myself highly amused, sometimes, at what people post on their LJs for the world and its kid brother to see. :) The people who were no longer watched on the newsletter's flist were still, of course, getting the newsletter on their own flist. It was just a matter of making things easier for the taggers.

However, this does mean that relative latecomers to the party - people like you and Redbyrd - do not have their LJs automatically picked up for tagging. That's why the profile page for the newsletter asks people to either e-mail the mods at sg1debrief @ gmail.com or leave a comment here to let them know that you want your LJ added to the flist for tagging.

I hope this is clear as mud. :)

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[info]redbyrd_sgfic
2007-10-11 08:52 pm UTC (link)
Nope, makes perfect sense. And I'll consider it my just reward for babbling all over your canon post *g*.

And, without the explanation? This was actually not at all obvious from the info on the comm.

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[info]aelfgyfu_mead
2007-10-11 08:52 pm UTC (link)
Very clear and helpful, really. Somehow I missed these little details when I signed up.

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[info]sg_fignewton
2007-10-11 09:10 pm UTC (link)
Redbyrd said she also hadn't seen it all that clearly on the profile page. I'll suggest to Julie that she take a look at it and see if it can be clarified.

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[info]sg1debrief
2007-10-12 12:07 am UTC (link)
Peeking in because Fig Newton said people were a little confused by the process. I went ahead and added you to the watch list journal, so you're all set!

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[info]aelfgyfu_mead
2007-10-13 03:20 pm UTC (link)
Thanks!

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[info]beatrice_otter
2007-10-12 07:08 pm UTC (link)
It sounds like you've got a really good system set up! I wonder if there's any way this setup could be used for [info]crossover_news. [info]jedibuttercup used to do it, but she got overwhelmed and behind and I think she finally gave up.

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[info]aurora_novarum
2007-10-11 06:19 pm UTC (link)
Whee! This was so great! I loved the Jaffa culture setting, and I thought Rya'c's pov was spot on. Drey'auc was just all kinds of awesome. And of course, Bra'tac always is. :-)

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[info]aelfgyfu_mead
2007-10-11 08:21 pm UTC (link)
That's something you just tossed off like a comment fic? Dang!

Bra'tac rules (as always). I can see him steamrolling Ry'ac; the kid doesn't have a chance. (Are Jaffa apostrophes really random, or is it just me?)

I too like the explanation of why Drey'auc won't go. It didn't make a whole lot of sense in the episode.

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[info]redbyrd_sgfic
2007-10-11 08:42 pm UTC (link)
No, no, not like a comment fic. You can't put 2300 words in a comment. It *started* as a comment fic, but LJ does not supply a shoehorn tool. Nor does making the text smaller do anything useful. I broke down about the point Ry'ac runs into Bra'tac in the woods and moved it to the word processor.

(I of course conscientiously wrote it only during my official breaks and lunch time, and did not keep opening it back up all morning to fling in another paragraph here or there which I wasn't thinking of at all while doing incredibly tedious paperwork. Nope, not me.)

I don't know about Jaffa apostrophes, mine are likely to turn up anywhere. I'm a fast typist, not an accurate one. *looks suspiciously at text for wandering punctuation*

Yeah, why leave Drey'auc and Ry'ac there- that's kind of a puzzler. I have to wonder if maybe there wasn't originally a scene where Teal'c and Drey'auc talk about it, which didn't make the final cut of the ep.

But hey, this is what I live for- has word-processor, will fix canon for FB...*g*.

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[info]aelfgyfu_mead
2007-10-11 08:57 pm UTC (link)
Very conscientious! And, of course, none of us is discussing this on work time.

I think you should make that last line into a LOL Cat:
i haz word processer
[picture of cat at computer]
will fix kanon

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[info]loriel_eris
2007-10-12 08:19 am UTC (link)
Very cool! I like this. *g* And I especially like that Ry'ac isn't (by the end) still all pissy with his father.

Also? Totally not comment fic. ;p

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[info]redbyrd_sgfic
2007-10-12 10:45 am UTC (link)
Yeah, I thought that Ry'ac probably didn't develop that attitude until he was an annoying teenager. We don't have a lot to work with, actually- he's unconscious for most of Bloodlines, brainwashed for all of Family Ties, and then we don't see him again until S6. I don't think at this point he was ever really pissy- more confused and upset. This is only a few months after COTG, so he hasn't really had time for the reality of the consequences of what Teal'c did to sink in.

Drey'auc is the one who's really had to deal with consequences. When Ry'ac gets sick, she begs the priests to do the implantation. Rather than continue to live as an outcast, she separates from Teal'c and takes up with his buddy. When they flee Chulak after Family Ties, she has to build a new life in a completely alien culture. And even though she separates from Teal'c, she embraces his cause to the point of dying rather than taking a new symbiote when hers dies in S6. In a real way, Drey'auc is Teal'c's first convert to the cause of the free Jaffa.

I've got bits and pieces of background floating around for the Land of Light, and what they might have looked like around S5-7. Someday I'll use them in a story! But baseball is very popular there, and they've become considerably more cosmopolitan with refugees and occasional SGC personnel floating in and out. Drey'auc may feel very out of place, but she still makes some firm friends among the other women there. They trade regularly with the Argosians (the planet with the nanites). Both they and the Argosians have benefitted from the assistance of SGC agricultural specialists, who have helped them grow crops more efficiently. And they take in a stream of refugees of one sort or another, some of whom stay and some who move on. (Of course you can see why I haven't used this yet- all background, no story!)

And no. Commentfic, not so much. As I've said elsewhere, I *like* the idea of shorter fics- among other things, I'm more likely to finish them! But my natural length seems to be rather longer.

Thanks for the fb!

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[info]beatrice_otter
2007-10-12 07:14 pm UTC (link)
Well, when you get a plot to put with it, it sounds like it could be a great story!

You could do it as a character-piece rather than as a plot-piece; maybe a series of vignettes from Drey'auc's POV through the years.

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[info]redbyrd_sgfic
2007-10-12 07:40 pm UTC (link)
Not you too! No feeding the plot bunnies! I have enough WIPs I need to finish. Argh!

Please go join [info]sg_fignewton and [info]aurora_novarum in the Evil Enabler corner. *g*

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[info]beatrice_otter
2007-10-12 08:45 pm UTC (link)
Hm. I've never been an Evil Enabler, before. I am, however, a card-carrying member of the Evil Writers Guild.

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[info]maychorian
2007-10-17 01:56 pm UTC (link)
What a lovely fic! There just isn't enough about the Jaffa. And you draw them all very well, right now to the tiniest details, like how the bread is better with honey but they haven't been able to have it for awhile.

Ry'ac is especially good--how he thinks like a child, still, about impressing his friends. But he's also determined to be a warrior and to follow in his father's footsteps, even while being upset that Teal'c left.

Completely believable, and good, and just, well, just right.

To me, this is canon.

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[info]redbyrd_sgfic
2007-10-17 04:10 pm UTC (link)
The Jaffa are rather difficult- in part because the canon is not always consistent. And children are just as alien (at least to me!) so, I'm doubly pleased with this. Thank you!

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[info]a_phoenixdragon
2007-12-23 02:34 pm UTC (link)
Wow!! This was gorgeous and awe-inspiring, darling!! I do so love to read your work, as your grasp of these characters is so firm and on the spot!

*hugs*

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[info]sg_fignewton
2008-04-10 04:31 pm UTC (link)
Remember how I said that Bra'tac completely stole the show as soon as he showed up? Well, guess what just got recced in the Bra'tac category? :)

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[info]redbyrd_sgfic
2008-04-11 12:04 am UTC (link)
Aw. Thanks for the rec...Bra'tac is just generally made of win...You're reccing Bra'tac this month? How did I miss that..? *goes off to look up other recs*

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[info]redbyrd_sgfic
2008-04-11 12:39 am UTC (link)
...okay, guess I didn't miss it. I said, 'ooh, Fig recced, shiny!' and went to read without actually paying attention to categories!

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[info]sg_fignewton
2008-04-11 05:47 am UTC (link)
Hee hee! Thanks for the compliment. :)

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[info]flingslass
2008-09-21 04:39 am UTC (link)
Just read this and I'm impressed at how well you've written Bra'tac. *I love Bra'tac* You show how much Bra'tac wants to teach Ry'ac to protect him.

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[info]redbyrd_sgfic
2008-09-22 06:25 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! Bra'tac is always awesome- notice how he pwns the fic as soon as he appears *g*!

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[info]flingslass
2008-09-23 10:52 am UTC (link)
forgive the silly question (even though I'm always telling my clients there's no such thing as a silly question :)) but what does pwns mean? Is it owns but like teh people keep spelling it wrong and then it stuck?

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[info]redbyrd_sgfic
2008-09-23 12:55 pm UTC (link)
Not a silly question at all- I had to look it up when I first encountered it. It's a bit of slang that's transitioned from online games and hacker culture, apparently. Probably originally a typo because o and p are next to each other on the keyboard. In gaming, it means to dominate or humiliate a rival, in hacking it refers to taking control of a computer system (one you're not supposed to). In fic terms, it's taken on sort of an affectionate connotation...'Teal'c pwns SG-1 in Continuum' is one I've seen. Or around my house (when I've been herded to the couch and firmly sat on- and discouraged from moving with cute purring)- 'my cat pwns me'. See the Wikipedia article for a more complete explanation with references.

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[info]flingslass
2008-09-24 11:01 am UTC (link)
Thank you for the explanation :D

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