redbyrd_sgfic ([info]redbyrd_sgfic) wrote,
@ 2007-02-26 20:22:00
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And now for something completely different....
So I was chatting with  [info]aurora_novarum , and we were trying to work out some of the details of Sam's history with Jonas Hanson for my interminably delayed S1 series.   And I wound up sketching out a scenelet that took place at the start of their relationship, after they returned from Desert Storm.   At first I thought I had actually committed a drabble!  (I never drabble- I'm far too wordy.)  But alas, no, this ran too long.  And it doesn't fit with the S1 series either, but it did make a nice bookend with a teensy little tag for The First Commandment:


The cherry blossoms blowing in the warm spring breeze lent the scene an improbable, inappropriate gaiety, far from the ruined city where these men, his friends, had died.

Sam stood at attention as the shots were fired, the words spoken, the flags lifted respectfully from the three polished coffins and folded. Hanson accepted the third flag for his teammate- Jeremy Franklin's family lived out west somewhere, and he had said the few relations he had weren't close.

As the small assembly dispersed Hanson lingered near the coffin. He reached into his jacket pocket and pulled out a small book, shiny-new with stiff covers. His Gideon bible. He laid it against the wood. The brash teasing facade she was accustomed to seeing was nowhere in evidence today.

Sam moved nearer. "He would have wanted you to keep it," she said quietly.

*

Sam stood at attention as the shots were fired, the words spoken, the flags lifted respectfully from the three polished coffins and folded. For security reasons, the government had declined to censure them postmortem. Hence dress blues in the chill April rain, and a small private ceremony at the military burial ground. Franks' coffin was flanked by those of his murderers. Lieutenant Connor, still heavily bandaged, stood beside Baker's wife, his face blank. The burns on his face were still angry and red.

Sam stepped forward to accept the third flag, Jonas' flag. He had family back east somewhere, but they weren't close. As the small assembly dispersed, Sam lingered near the coffin, damp with the spray of rain.

"You knew I would come, didn't you?" She asked softly.

Memory whispered back, "How could you not? Healer of the emotionally wounded. I was your one failure. The bird with the broken wing that wouldn't heal."

Sam swallowed hard, laid his worn Gideon bible on the polished wood, and turned away.

*



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[info]beatrice_otter
2007-02-27 02:34 am UTC (link)
For security reasons, the government had declined to hold courts' martial postmortem.

Um, do they hold courts-martial post-mortem? That seems kind of wierd, to me.

Other than that, I like it.

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[info]redbyrd_sgfic
2007-02-27 12:49 pm UTC (link)
You're correct, they wouldn't hold a court martial, which is a judicial proceeding.

Officers killed while committing a crime might well be denied military honors at their funeral however, which is where I was going with that.

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[info]beatrice_otter
2007-02-27 01:42 pm UTC (link)
I'd clarify that. Otherwise, it's a great tag.

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[info]redbyrd_sgfic
2007-02-27 03:29 pm UTC (link)
I edited the story slightly, to correct this- thanks for pointing out the error.

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[info]princessofg
2007-02-27 12:13 pm UTC (link)
*sad*

thank you for posting this.

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[info]alopekis
2007-02-27 02:23 pm UTC (link)
Interesting. Very visual, at least for me- I saw the scenes in my head a couple beats before the actual content hit me. Thanks!

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[info]redbyrd_sgfic
2007-02-27 05:13 pm UTC (link)
Interesting that it comes across- I'm very visually oriented and often think of writing in cinematic terms. Glad you liked it!

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[info]aurora_novarum
2007-02-27 04:06 pm UTC (link)
Wow, interesting parallel. Our conversation definitely took your muse to an amazing place. [info]alopekis is right, it's very visual.

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[info]redbyrd_sgfic
2007-02-27 05:16 pm UTC (link)
It was when I thought about the comparison to the aftermath of the episode and realized that there were three casualties there, too, that I realized I had an episode tag. I expect there'll be an oblique reference or two to the backstory we discussed in that part the of S1 series, when I finally get it licked.

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[info]a_phoenixdragon
2007-07-29 11:21 pm UTC (link)
Wow... I know I'm waaaayyyyy late with this, but...

WOW...

*Sucks in a breath*

*hugs you hard*

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[info]redbyrd_sgfic
2007-07-30 02:15 am UTC (link)
Hey, glad I could provide some distraction :).

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